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Old 08-27-2008, 12:13 PM   #1 (permalink)
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SANITY - Written as a challenge (5 minute poem)

Ladies and gentlemen, I have been invited to join the poetry group on this fine forum – but it seems one of the prereqs is to have TWO poems posted. Alas! I have but one up here. Threfore the question was – do I stick one of my old ones up here or do I give these lovely people something new?
So I whipped something up.

PRESENTING – One of the first poems I have written in such a long time (the ‘exasco’ poem was the first in about 2 years).
It’s a challenge one, written in 5 minutes (not kidding) – But I’m proud of it.

I decided that every sentence was going to end with a word that rhymed with day - I know, silly right? But I do love a challenge.

The result:

“Sanity”

Sanity took a walk one day
Her face was happy, bright and gay
She stopped to look the other way
To where I stood: still in dismay.

I had shout: ‘delay’, delay’
“Lets us climb again upon the hay,
Spinning, dancing, let us play!
I do not wish to die today!”

In death upon the ground I lay:
Was this the price I had to pay?
Was she demon, or was she the fay?
And why, oh why, did she go away?

It was a sunny day in May.
Her warmth had kept the dark at bay,
I whispered soft to make her stay
Her voice strung high, a violent ‘Nay’.

And shadows swept her all away.
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Old 08-27-2008, 12:56 PM   #2 (permalink)
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haha i really like that poem,
its very creative and sounds pretty good aswell
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Old 08-28-2008, 02:01 AM   #3 (permalink)
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And here i thought I was just being silly. I just wanted to write a silly little poem - but it turned into a narrative of Sanity personified, leaving the protaganist behind to waste away. It's a little mysterious - overall, I was happy with the result.
This isn't the first time this has happened you know - I always write with dark themes and my uncle told me to go write a happy one. I tried, seriously I tried - but it turned dark on its own accord!!! I'll have to put it up here sometime.
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that was great... i loved reading it
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magnifico! especially finding a word to end with day...that was bloody brilliant
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ill draw a picture, a picture on my rist, ill draw it with a razor, ill draw it with a twist, and as i draw this picutre, a fountain will appear and as the fountain starts to flow all my problems will disappear
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