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07-03-2008, 04:46 PM
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Making Progress
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My Lover.... *trigger*
show me wonder, show me greed
slit my wrists and watch me bleed
steal my heart, rape my soul
break me down to make you whole
look at me with love and scorn
lost inside both broke and torn
through the anger love did grow
kiss me now and kill me slow
steal my money, lose my mind
lost forever none can find
kiss my lips, touch my breast
rip my heart out of my chest
there's nothing of me left for you
eyes go blank, lips turn blue
you want more but i am dead
lying there upon me bed
child of the darkness
this is an old poem i wrote when i was 16... and some of u old exasco might have read it b4....
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"heres to all the soldiers who have ever died in vain, the insane locked up in themselves the homeless down on main. To those who stand on empty shores and spin against the wind, and to those who wait forever, for ships that won't come in"
"Ti amo, Jeg elsker deg, Je vous aime, Ik hou van jou, Amo-o, Miluji tě, Я люблю Вас, Le amo, Volim Te, Σε αγαπώ"
Ten ways to say: I LOVE YOU!
Pillz-e, Foamy and Johnny the Homicidal Maniac.... Gotta love em
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07-03-2008, 07:02 PM
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A Bit Of A Chatty One I Am
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this is very good, I barely ever have the ability to keep a poem structured and still have an awesome message, you did both so kudos
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We need to pass the torch, and let our children read our messy
and sad history by its light. We have all the magic of the
digital age to do that with. The human race will probably come to
an end some time, and new species may rule over this planet. Earth
may not be forever, but we still have the responsibility to leave
what traces of life we can. Building the future and keeping the
past alive are one and the same thing.-Solid Snake
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07-03-2008, 07:18 PM
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Making Progress
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thank you.... i have a lot of poems... i am kind of a nut about structure... i dunno y...
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"heres to all the soldiers who have ever died in vain, the insane locked up in themselves the homeless down on main. To those who stand on empty shores and spin against the wind, and to those who wait forever, for ships that won't come in"
"Ti amo, Jeg elsker deg, Je vous aime, Ik hou van jou, Amo-o, Miluji tě, Я люблю Вас, Le amo, Volim Te, Σε αγαπώ"
Ten ways to say: I LOVE YOU!
Pillz-e, Foamy and Johnny the Homicidal Maniac.... Gotta love em
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07-04-2008, 09:05 AM
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A Bit Of A Chatty One I Am
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Nothing wrong with that
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, I like to streach the limits. I usually right freeform, or at the very least come up with some very weird structure that only I can follow lol
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Life isn't just about passing on your genes. We can leave behind
much more than just DNA. Through speech, music, literature and
movies... what we've seen, heard, felt ...anger, joy and
sorrow... these are the things I will pass on. That's what I
live for.
We need to pass the torch, and let our children read our messy
and sad history by its light. We have all the magic of the
digital age to do that with. The human race will probably come to
an end some time, and new species may rule over this planet. Earth
may not be forever, but we still have the responsibility to leave
what traces of life we can. Building the future and keeping the
past alive are one and the same thing.-Solid Snake
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07-04-2008, 01:34 PM
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Kitchen Bitch.
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Very nice
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Whenever i write, i also write heavily structured....but my poems suck :(
Good job
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07-05-2008, 01:28 AM
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Making Progress
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well thank you.... sometimes i just write weird stuff... there are a few that are hard for even me to understand any more.... i wrote most of my stuff when i was like 16 and 17... but some stuff i don't even remember writing...
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"heres to all the soldiers who have ever died in vain, the insane locked up in themselves the homeless down on main. To those who stand on empty shores and spin against the wind, and to those who wait forever, for ships that won't come in"
"Ti amo, Jeg elsker deg, Je vous aime, Ik hou van jou, Amo-o, Miluji tě, Я люблю Вас, Le amo, Volim Te, Σε αγαπώ"
Ten ways to say: I LOVE YOU!
Pillz-e, Foamy and Johnny the Homicidal Maniac.... Gotta love em
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07-05-2008, 08:34 AM
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A Bit Of A Chatty One I Am
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yeah, I kinda wrote all of my stuff during a period when I was in a bad relationship, and then it just kidna stopped after that.
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Life isn't just about passing on your genes. We can leave behind
much more than just DNA. Through speech, music, literature and
movies... what we've seen, heard, felt ...anger, joy and
sorrow... these are the things I will pass on. That's what I
live for.
We need to pass the torch, and let our children read our messy
and sad history by its light. We have all the magic of the
digital age to do that with. The human race will probably come to
an end some time, and new species may rule over this planet. Earth
may not be forever, but we still have the responsibility to leave
what traces of life we can. Building the future and keeping the
past alive are one and the same thing.-Solid Snake
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07-16-2008, 11:49 PM
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I scream, you dont notice
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yeh i wrote when i was younger not so much now i used to have to feel really shit to write and then it was always structured...
Anyway immense poem i really like your work!
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