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Old 02-13-2008, 07:22 AM   #1 (permalink)
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A thousand tears.

A thousand tears I cried each day
my heart torn from my chest
I cry for you, “please don’t go away”
this little child, so distressed.

For 180 days I cry
a thousand tears of blood each day
each day a little more of me started to die
“Adam please stay”

It hurt me the most, but you didn’t care
and that’s when the love began to decay
this became a living nightmare.
All the days turned to grey.

3pm represented a person to me
at a time when super Adam saved my days.
For god sake, I was only THREE!
Life torn apart, family has gone its separate ways.

15 years down the path,
I’m bitter and spiteful, never again to be the same.
This is your creation, your aftermath.
This is what I became.
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Old 02-13-2008, 08:00 AM   #2 (permalink)
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i really like that. it has a good rhythem to it. Really touching aswell. xxx
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Old 02-13-2008, 03:55 PM   #3 (permalink)
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yummy, I luvs it
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Old 02-14-2008, 05:37 AM   #4 (permalink)
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thanks guy.
although i dont think the poem rhymed at all
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Old 02-14-2008, 06:14 AM   #5 (permalink)
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i like it.
and of course it rhymes. the last word on lines 1 & 3 in each verse rhymes. but if you're talking about what broken said, she said rhythym not rhyme.
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but seriously, good poem.
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Old 02-14-2008, 08:11 AM   #6 (permalink)
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haha rhythym, rhyme... whats the difference? lol
oh wait.. i think i know
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Old 02-27-2008, 05:40 PM   #7 (permalink)
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nice...that was really powerfull
Loved it...
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